What about Tennis for Two? That used an oscilloscope (did I spell that right?) type display, not even pixels!

Then if you come to my school be sure that you have plenty of N64 controlles, because you'll need quite some of them

if anyone says doom was the first FPS ever I will shoot them with a BFG

i do that kinda thing with my story. like a huge mass of inventions, and back up info, and famous people, that aren't even mentioned in the story. *sequel!* its basically the wookieepedia.com for Captains of the universe.

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also, mentioning the sequel, id like to feature the crobos in it. they are probably gonna be bad though, but extremely powerful.

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*dont read the one in the forum, its the wrong one.

I think this might get moved to Off-Topic.

okay b14 is out now MAKE CRIMSON BROS PLOX

If they say that, i would get Robo-Hitler onto their asses(lol wolfenstein3d) awesome game

NES was the first consloe ever, not N64!

Ahem... What about Magnavox Odyssey?

But, please make those "Crimson Brothers"! They would be nice add. And then I could kill those traitors. Yup.

GAH! STOP BEING WRONG!

the first console ever was the Pong home system. I just prefer the N64 controller because of the middle handle.

Have you noticed how Off-Topic this thread has gone?

Actaully I forgot what the topic was until you said that.

Haha, if the mods want to move this to off topic I've got no problem with that, it's linked in my sig so it shouldn't be missed by those that need to see it.

A brisk and timely reminder when I was just itching to get into the thick of a game design discussion and slag off anyone who'd disagree Space War was the first proper computer game.

On topic:
Nice backstory, intrigue and war et al. I like the idea of neurological disorder in freed clones, and the ongoing rebellion of the Lost and Found. I'll try and help with any crit I can from a writer perspective...

- Main thing I would say is, some sentences are a bit long. I would split 'em up a bit, particularly around the explanation of Red's dissent.

- I dunno if you wanted to, but maybe make more of a twist in there somewhere? A betrayl or two goes a long way into building dramatic tension. I know Red was a betrayer technically, but I'm talking about the dastardly kind. That's really down to your vision, though. I understand if you like things the way you thought them up, as you know I'm very much the same =D

- Was there something about the master Crobo brain that caused Red to rebel in the first place? What did it witness and why was it so wrong he had to stand against everything he'd been created to serve? Or is that a surprise for a deeper story?

- One or two mistypes, but unless you want to keep it somewhere permanent and have it type-clean they're hardly worth hunting 'cause it reads fine =P

Hope that's of some use to yer, you dirty great cyborg

Quite frankly, with the added backstory now, I think the Crobos are my favorite mods.
Creativity- 9/10 (only because they're just robots)
Art- 10/10 (Spriting can't be improved; great, consistent visual theme)
Sounds- 9/10 (Very good sounds; can get a little grating occasionally)
Coding/balance/etc.- 10/10 (All there is to say)
Backstory- 8/10 (I know there could be better backstories for mods but quite frankly I can't think of any)
Total- 46/50 (94%)
Yep, a winner is Capnbubs.