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 A War to End All wars: By AlphaCommando; Chapter 13 

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 A War to End All wars: By AlphaCommando; Chapter 13 
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Can i be in it? :???:


Thu May 24, 2007 10:22 pm
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Yay chapter 9 is out, woo its long, hope you all enjoy

@Tendrop, Ill think about it, you'll have to be somewhere else in the story, I allready got waaaaaay too many people.

EDIT: Chapter 10 posted too, I'm done for a while, not only is my creativity drained, but I typed 3 fricking chapters in one day!


Thu May 24, 2007 11:25 pm
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Evil spartans? Yay, plot twist (what would Dr. Halsey say?) . Can't wait until the next chapter. Oh and you should ask Bungie if they'd let you write the next novel.

Spartans FTW!!! 8) :xbox: :x360:


Fri May 25, 2007 1:39 pm
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Yep "Evil" Spartans, trust me their alot more evil than you think, *another plot twist*
*off topic* Holy where did you get the Forum Bar banner, can you give it to me?


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Spooky, three chapters at once. D:


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Well, I had been writing them down for the last two days on paper, and just decided to type and release them all at once.


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Here's the link to the bar (lawl, Holy made a funny).

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Or you can right click and select properties, but whatever.


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Thanks :smile: . As for the story; readers may find that I am focusing too much on certian characters, and not enough on others, firstly I appologize; it's just so hard with so many characters to give everyone a equal ammount, some of the reasons certian characters have more parts is because they have a larger "role". Like Dauss, who is my second in command, so he has alot of speaking parts, as does Junkie due to his characters chatty nature. So I wish to ask for any suggestions you might have to making the story more balanced, or just better in general.


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Yeah, but I feel I don't get enough combat parts...

But I do agree with you.


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Moar Moar Moar!!how do you like it, how do you like it?
Moar Moar Moar!! how do you like it, how do you like it?


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Hey Holy Mombasa not to be off topic, but have you read Halo: Ghosts of Onyx yet? I ask because you mention Doctor Halsey, the founder of Spartan program, and she is only mentioned in the books. If you have, how is it?


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I have an idea.....

make anenemy squad too.......
and put tendrop & others there, they could be main enemy troopers, like the spartans


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New chapter(s) on monday-teusday
Yes the others, were going to be the names of the other 4 spatrans (apart from the ones I named allready) in the, and not giving too much away; we won't get a chance to fight them this time, they gonna do some bad poo then escape. They are going to be the squad's rivals 10 Spartans vs. our squad.

OH and Ghosts of Onyx kiscks a**, definilty a good buy ;).


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Yeah tendrop, I've read all the HAlo novels. Ghosts of Onyx is really good, if you don't have it, go pick it up.


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Chapter 11 is out, things are goning to be quite tense in the next chapter :) .


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