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dapaperboy
Joined: Fri Jun 15, 2007 6:47 am Posts: 430
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
"blind" and "dimes" dont rhyme that much. to much rhyming i think. is that a form of poetry like a Shakespearean sonnet or a haiku?
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Falcon X
Joined: Thu Aug 09, 2007 6:37 pm Posts: 889 Location: Not Jewtown.
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
This is actually pretty good.
The rhyming scheme is a tad off, and the 3 line style chokes up the mood to a choppy ride. All in all though, 7/10. Keep up the good work.
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Tue May 20, 2008 10:08 pm |
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reioko2101
Joined: Mon Jun 18, 2007 8:03 pm Posts: 77 Location: strongbadia
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
wow...i totally didn't expect the topic to last THIS long...Thanks for all the comments everybody!
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Wed May 21, 2008 6:44 pm |
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Roy-G-Biv
Joined: Mon Feb 12, 2007 12:46 am Posts: 1765 Location: ..............
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
dapaperboy wrote: "blind" and "dimes" dont rhyme that much. to much rhyming i think. is that a form of poetry like a Shakespearean sonnet or a haiku? Blind and Dime does rhyme perfectly. He probabily studied about William Shakesphere. One of the greatest playwrights of all time. But some people are questioning his success. Shakesphere didn't need special effects crap to make "Romeo and Juliet".
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Wed May 21, 2008 10:24 pm |
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Grif
REAL AMERICAN HERO
Joined: Sat Jan 27, 2007 10:25 pm Posts: 5655
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
What.
Blind and dime don't rhyme.
DIME and RHYME rhyme. Blind = BUH-LIND. Dime = DYME. EYND != YME.
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Thu May 22, 2008 2:22 am |
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TheLastBanana
DRL Developer
Joined: Wed Dec 13, 2006 5:27 am Posts: 3138 Location: A little south and a lot west of Moscow
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
No, they don't rhyme, but poetry doesn't have to rhyme perfectly. In fact, most people wouldn't have noticed it if it had moved more smoothly.
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Mon May 26, 2008 3:08 am |
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The Fat Sand Rat
Joined: Sun Apr 15, 2007 5:56 am Posts: 1191 Location: outside the shithole called the University in the Forest
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
I don't think the mentally retarded children of the forum understand, but Romeo and Juliet was what we call popular entertainment. So 'studying about one of the greatest playwrights of all time' won't really help in the slightest ♥♥♥♥ bit in writing coherently and well, because Shakesphere was a bisexual Dan Brown-esque writer of total ♥♥♥♥.
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Mon May 26, 2008 6:53 pm |
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Alenth Eneil
Joined: Mon Dec 04, 2006 3:34 am Posts: 2378
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
Why are we even talking about Shakespeare; stop.
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Mon May 26, 2008 7:17 pm |
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LFYOBdump 640k
Joined: Fri Mar 30, 2007 10:22 pm Posts: 25
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
The poetry.com thing is a scam.
What they'll ask of you next email is to give them a 70 dollar commission to include it in their book, and then ask you to buy 3 copies (at 40 bucks a pop).
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Fri Jun 06, 2008 11:28 pm |
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PlasmaNova
Joined: Fri Dec 14, 2007 10:27 pm Posts: 71
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
Congratulations
(for lack of a better word)
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Sun Jun 08, 2008 4:22 pm |
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Jawalt
Joined: Sat Jun 07, 2008 3:30 am Posts: 15
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
Very nice. I'd just like to say that those saying "I don't get it" I don't think poetry always means something to everyone. Also no it doesn't rhyme perfectly ,but poems don't have to rhyme perfectly.
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Sun Jun 08, 2008 9:04 pm |
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reioko2101
Joined: Mon Jun 18, 2007 8:03 pm Posts: 77 Location: strongbadia
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Re: I Have Been Published!!
You see, I thought it might be a scam too, before they sent me my writers proof, and didn't require me to buy it. (A writer's proof is like the final copy to make edits on)
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Mon Jun 09, 2008 3:40 am |
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