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Roast Veg
Data Realms Elite
Joined: Tue May 25, 2010 8:27 pm Posts: 4521 Location: Constant motion
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 Re: Art Dump
Why must my Haikus be in italics? Because matty started it.
Screw you contrary. I like my Haikus, and so will make another.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:36 pm |
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dragonxp
Joined: Wed Sep 09, 2009 3:16 am Posts: 3032 Location: Somewhere in the universe
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 Re: Art Dump
I think i am sad Of these horrible Haikus So stop making them
Last edited by dragonxp on Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:58 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:47 pm |
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Duh102
happy carebear mom
Joined: Tue Mar 04, 2008 1:40 am Posts: 7096 Location: b8bbd5
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Not a haiku, the first line has 6 syllables.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:55 pm |
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dragonxp
Joined: Wed Sep 09, 2009 3:16 am Posts: 3032 Location: Somewhere in the universe
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Duh102 wrote: Not a haiku, the first line has 6 syllables. Godamnit. Excuse my horrible syllables.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:58 pm |
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Roast Veg
Data Realms Elite
Joined: Tue May 25, 2010 8:27 pm Posts: 4521 Location: Constant motion
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 Re: Art Dump
Don't worry, it marked the end of the haikus anyway.
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 9:59 pm |
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findude
Joined: Tue Dec 12, 2006 3:10 pm Posts: 495 Location: Uncertain quantum state
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It's so late  Uh antialiased lines, blur and a sorta eye? ART, MATE
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Sat Sep 25, 2010 10:20 pm |
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CrazyMLC
Joined: Fri Dec 22, 2006 4:20 am Posts: 4772 Location: Good news everyone!
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The main purpose of Haikus is to describe nature's beauty.
Small children running In summer's vast fields of gold Dancing in the sun
Last edited by CrazyMLC on Sun Sep 26, 2010 12:21 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 12:09 am |
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CaveCricket48
Joined: Tue Jun 12, 2007 11:52 pm Posts: 13144 Location: Here
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That last line has 6 syllables.
The way of haikus is five to seven to five, no deviations
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 12:12 am |
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Petethegoat
Joined: Mon Jun 15, 2009 4:02 pm Posts: 905
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Write Haikus backwards Now then, break the mold, Post Haikus in bold
Edit: I call it meta-poetry.
Edit: Read Haikus backwards Slightly different meaning Insignificant
Not really happy with the second one. :\
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 12:30 am |
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madmax
Joined: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:01 pm Posts: 378 Location: Nomadic
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First "pixel drawing" I've done in months 
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 8:11 am |
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Natti
Data Realms Elite
Joined: Fri Jul 03, 2009 11:05 am Posts: 3878
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That's very good, madmax!
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 8:29 am |
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411570N3
Joined: Wed Jan 07, 2009 10:26 am Posts: 4074 Location: That quaint little British colony down south
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Gibbed is one syllable. The format is 5, 7, 5. You could probably do a different format though - there are lots of them in the same style but longer at the very least if not more flexible.
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 9:03 am |
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CrazyMLC
Joined: Fri Dec 22, 2006 4:20 am Posts: 4772 Location: Good news everyone!
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You could always explore beyond the limits of Haikus. There is a very skilled pianist from the lands of Paris Whom musicians across the globe respect and cherish
She would travel the world forever And play for those whom adore her Unfortunately for them this poor pianist is fingerlessEDIT: Roast, that poem seems okay, but you could always be a bit more poetic... "it gibbed and killed me." is a little anti-climactic, you know? I'd also recommend avoiding commas, as they seem to break the flow of the poem. Having each line be incomplete might not help with the flow much though.
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 11:39 am |
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Photocopier
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 WIP of a collab lizzard and I are working on. Kinda inspired by coffee over at pixelation EDIT:  Updated!
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 4:23 pm |
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Lizardheim
DRL Developer
Joined: Fri May 15, 2009 10:29 am Posts: 4107 Location: Russia
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 Collab with Photocopier.
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Mon Sep 27, 2010 9:26 pm |
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