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| Author: | 10050 [ Fri Jan 18, 2008 9:33 pm ] | ||
| Post subject: | Short ww2 story. | ||
Here is a short story i wrote, its an alternate reality about world war 2. If you guys want, you can post your opinions. I also am seriously considering extending this so tell me what you think.
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| Author: | The Fat Sand Rat [ Fri Jan 18, 2008 10:20 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Short ww2 story. |
Do not pass go, do not collect $200. Send to a proofreader. Mechanics are too wonky for an easy read. |
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| Author: | Orindell [ Fri Jan 18, 2008 11:04 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Short ww2 story. |
Its good. But there are many problems. Needs to be proof-read, And also some areas re-written. Number One: Its very unlikly that ALL of Europe would fall. Most likily Britian and Ireland, ALong with Swizterland would remain free. Maybe some others, LIke spain etc... And there is no way America would fall in that time period, More likily a small section would fall, And then the area may be expanded, But this is all shooting in the dark. Good ideas though... |
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