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Orindell
Joined: Wed Mar 21, 2007 10:15 pm
Posts: 440
Location: Dublin, Ireland
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Best Chapter yet.Maybe the naxt Chapter can be only about the releationships within the group?Wadda ya think?
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:42 pm |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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That was the idea, I need to focus on that a little more, and the next chapter is a great time to introduce new characters, and show how the ment in the squad get along.
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:43 pm |
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Mombasa
Joined: Tue Mar 06, 2007 12:21 am
Posts: 355
Location: Florida: The Oil Capitol of the United States
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Oh yeah, Commando, do you have a concept or picture of the sword you use? I'd like to see what you raped the wolf thing with.
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:44 pm |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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Kind of like this, except way big and more decorative:
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:48 pm |
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Mombasa
Joined: Tue Mar 06, 2007 12:21 am
Posts: 355
Location: Florida: The Oil Capitol of the United States
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That, looks pretty good. ENERGY SWORD IS BETTER!!!!
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:50 pm |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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Yeah energy sword is better, but I wanted a cool tangible type of blade to use as I am quite skilled with bladed weapons in real life, so I went for that effect.
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:53 pm |
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Mombasa
Joined: Tue Mar 06, 2007 12:21 am
Posts: 355
Location: Florida: The Oil Capitol of the United States
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Well, the next chapter's gonna be interesting....
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| Thu May 10, 2007 10:54 pm |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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Helooo, dose anyone esle have anything to say, I need feedback to make the next chapter better.
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| Fri May 11, 2007 4:10 am |
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couchcaboose
Joined: Tue Oct 31, 2006 6:10 pm
Posts: 358
Location: at ze kopta!
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A less short Ending?
The end was kind of rushed...
"Brain killed bai Kaoz lulz. K teme letz gu hume!!11"
Yeah... Either than that it was cool. 
(updated my character too)
couchcaboose wrote: Oh yeah, I'm changing my Melee weapon... Or adding one.
It's either a knife or a REALLY SHARP DOUBLE FOLDED STEEL KATANA.
(Folded steel swords are much stronger than usual swords. Most old samurai swords are double/dual folded steal)
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| Fri May 11, 2007 4:14 am |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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Yeah the ending was rushed, I was excited about releasing the new chapter and wrapped it up too hastily.
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| Fri May 11, 2007 4:16 am |
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Elpolodiablo
Joined: Sat Dec 23, 2006 12:37 pm
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Well you know if you wanted to you could turn up my character a lot you know like riping dudes chests open and crap like that.  ...
or give him Genetic morphic instability (Lycanthropy (werewolf))
but if you like him as he is then its still very cool.
The chapter was great.
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| Fri May 11, 2007 12:04 pm |
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AlphaCommando
Joined: Wed May 02, 2007 10:27 pm
Posts: 514
Location: Eating ice cream at Graeter's
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Thx, next chapter is more talky than actiony, and will help develop character personalities, your character, and serial are some the key characters, next chapter.
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| Fri May 11, 2007 5:26 pm |
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Orindell
Joined: Wed Mar 21, 2007 10:15 pm
Posts: 440
Location: Dublin, Ireland
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I have been thinking.Alpha I am going to PM you an idea.
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| Fri May 11, 2007 10:03 pm |
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Dauss
A HUMAN BRAIN, SAFELY INSULATED FROM THE TERRORS OF HYPERSPACE
Joined: Sun Jan 28, 2007 8:54 pm
Posts: 1070
Location: Somewhere beyond the endless sea of hyperspace, fighting for your right to call a planet home.
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I was gonna post this earlier, but my internet was being horrible all voer the place.
You've got fan art...
Spent like, 5 minutes, so it's not to great.
It's suposed to be one of those wolf robots, by the way...
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| Fri May 11, 2007 10:12 pm |
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Mombasa
Joined: Tue Mar 06, 2007 12:21 am
Posts: 355
Location: Florida: The Oil Capitol of the United States
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WE NEEDZ a NEW CHAPTA!!!
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